The Long Held Breath

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« on: May 15, 2014, 03:37:04 pm »
The Long Held Breath

A Bakker short, mentioned to have been used in a creative writing class, but ultimately revealed as a portion of Light, Time, and Gravity.
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« Reply #1 on: May 15, 2014, 04:20:14 pm »
So, this is a story about peeing? What's next? The black urine?

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« Reply #2 on: May 15, 2014, 06:29:24 pm »
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So, this is a story about peeing? What's next? The black urine?

The inverse anus is his next installment. Are you sure the message is about peeing? :)

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« Reply #3 on: May 19, 2014, 08:29:00 pm »
I thought it was about being bullied?
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« Reply #4 on: May 19, 2014, 09:02:32 pm »
The inverse anus is his next installment.

The sad thing is that I honestly wouldn't put it beyond him. In fact I wouldn't be surprised if the third series in TSA is actually the Inverse Anus.

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« Reply #5 on: June 05, 2014, 01:23:37 pm »
I thought it was more about being the bully and the ego it creates.

Good short though.

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« Reply #6 on: August 08, 2014, 06:35:54 pm »
“Bease!” he cried through snot and cramp and fire. “Bease! Leave me alone!“

This is naked Bakker. It is such a powerful sentence; snot and cramp and fire are just so evocative, coupled with the distortion of speech this paints a fantasticly vivid scene for me. This could have come out of the mouth of any Inchie/Sranc/Cnaiur prisoner.