The Second Apocalypse
Other Titles => Short Stories & Others => Topic started by: Madness on May 15, 2014, 03:37:04 pm
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The Long Held Breath (http://rsbakker.wordpress.com/stories/the-long-held-breath/)
A Bakker short, mentioned to have been used in a creative writing class, but ultimately revealed as a portion of Light, Time, and Gravity.
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So, this is a story about peeing? What's next? The black urine?
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So, this is a story about peeing? What's next? The black urine?
The inverse anus is his next installment. Are you sure the message is about peeing? :)
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I thought it was about being bullied?
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The inverse anus is his next installment.
The sad thing is that I honestly wouldn't put it beyond him. In fact I wouldn't be surprised if the third series in TSA is actually the Inverse Anus.
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I thought it was more about being the bully and the ego it creates.
Good short though.
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“Bease!” he cried through snot and cramp and fire. “Bease! Leave me alone!“
This is naked Bakker. It is such a powerful sentence; snot and cramp and fire are just so evocative, coupled with the distortion of speech this paints a fantasticly vivid scene for me. This could have come out of the mouth of any Inchie/Sranc/Cnaiur prisoner.