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[TGO SPOILERS] ... (and other criticism of TGO)

« on: May 15, 2016, 12:37:21 am »
If I had one criticism, it would be the potentially egregious overuse of ellipses.
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« Reply #1 on: May 15, 2016, 06:00:22 pm »
Why "..." ? We can't have a legit criticisms thread?

EDIT: I'm thick. Your ability to meta is beyond my ken.
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« Reply #2 on: May 15, 2016, 07:11:30 pm »
lol man its because I was complaing about the ellipse.

I can change the thread title to criticism though. That's the only one I got though.
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« Reply #3 on: May 16, 2016, 12:23:29 am »
Quote from: Wilshire on May 15, 2016, 07:11:30 pm
lol man its because I was complaing about the ellipse.

Lol - nah, I got that as per my edit ;).
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« Reply #4 on: May 16, 2016, 02:18:48 pm »
I don't mind it...in fact, I kind of like it, even if it is slightly...overdone?
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« Reply #5 on: May 16, 2016, 03:15:03 pm »
There just seemed to be ... a lot of them.  Like using the same adjective over and over, it looses some of its punch.

But nothing builds suspense quite like ... an ellipse!
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« Reply #6 on: May 17, 2016, 08:29:15 pm »
I wish there was a way to annotate and give corrections back to Overlook.  So many missing umlauts or umlauts where there shouldn't be.  Missing apostrophes.  "Kjineta" vs. "kijneta."  The past participle of "sow" for agriculture is "sown" not "sewn." Uuuugh.  Just a few off the top of my head.
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« Reply #7 on: May 17, 2016, 08:32:31 pm »
Well maybe the final will have some edits...
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« Reply #8 on: May 17, 2016, 08:54:24 pm »
Quote from: Hirtius/Pansa on May 17, 2016, 08:29:15 pm
I wish there was a way to annotate and give corrections back to Overlook.  So many missing umlauts or umlauts where there shouldn't be.  Missing apostrophes.  "Kjineta" vs. "kijneta."  The past participle of "sow" for agriculture is "sown" not "sewn." Uuuugh.  Just a few off the top of my head.
"Uncorrected Proof" - hopefully they fix it in the final version.
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« Reply #9 on: May 17, 2016, 09:23:44 pm »
Yeah, and in the final edition of WLW, Achamian and Cleric are fighting a sorcerous "dual" over the ruins of Sauglish. :P  I know it's an uncorrected early edition, but Overlook haven't exactly endeared me to them with the handling of this manuscript, and I want this book to be in the most pristine condition state possible.  Whatever—I know it's just hot air on my part.
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« Reply #10 on: May 18, 2016, 02:36:45 am »
I hate overlook more than most people, I feel ya.
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« Reply #11 on: May 19, 2016, 12:48:10 am »
Quote from: Hirtius/Pansa on May 17, 2016, 09:23:44 pm
Yeah, and in the final edition of WLW, Achamian and Cleric are fighting a sorcerous "dual" over the ruins of Sauglish. :P  I know it's an uncorrected early edition, but Overlook haven't exactly endeared me to them with the handling of this manuscript, and I want this book to be in the most pristine condition state possible.  Whatever—I know it's just hot air on my part.

I'm glad you've returned, HP.
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« Reply #12 on: May 19, 2016, 10:40:19 pm »
Ha ha ha. Yeah, it bothered me too, but not as much as the overuse of the word "wrack."
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« Reply #13 on: May 21, 2016, 11:47:32 pm »
For my part, I believe "dread" and "ere" were what I picked up on.

But Bakker's response to me then is born out now: different readers are bothered by the frequencies of different words.
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« Reply #14 on: May 22, 2016, 02:02:07 pm »
Perhaps some continuity issues:
Late Summer
Late Summer
Late Summer
Early Autumn
Early Autumn
Early Autumn
Early Autumn
Late Summer
Early Autumn
Late Summer
Late Summer
Mid-Autumn
Early Autumn
Late Summer
Early Autumn
Late Summer
Mid-Autumn
Late Summer

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Some weird issues.  Akka and Mimara see the mushroom cloud in Autumn but apparently the nuke disrupted the flow of time because the Ordeal is struggling in Summer the next chapter.  And then encountering Cnaiur rewinds time.  The date in a few chapters is notated as 4123.
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